A Different NewYork

[flew to high]

This is my first attempt of writing my own Warriors story please tell me what you think.

11:38pm four months since the meeting

“Are them cats still on us?â€

[Baby Bear]

Very cool story. I liked it. Good description. You should've made a different gang wanna make a move on the A.C's.For example when you said the Furies wanted to take out The Turnbulls you should've used a gang that people aren't familiar with so the reader can say "Wow I never heard of those guys!"

Keep up the great work. Make more fan fiction stories. You have some talent.

[flew to high]

I said it would be a while untill my next chapter but I just got so into my writing that I wrote another chapter so enjoy.

Chapter 2
“Swanâ€

[Baby Bear]

You did good again. You could've made your chapter a little longer.

[The Swan]

You did good again. You could've made your chapter a little longer.

Ye flew to high very good job, very good ideas... I agree BB, chapters a little longer would make your story almost perfect!!! 8)

[Hector]

Excellent job, keep it up! Oh, and sometimes having chapters shorter, depending on what you put in them, can still be good.

[flew to high]

Here You go guys the long awaited 3rd chapter.Enjoy!

Chapter 3
10:42 The next night
“I’ve called you all here tonight,â€

[Rembrandt_Swan_Ajax4ever]

i love it nice work

[flew to high]

Ladies and gentleman here is the much awaited next chapter. Enjoy!

Chapter 4

The large metal doors of the warehouse were thrown open with such force that the sound echoed throughout the building. Swan stormed into the building like a mad man. “WARRIORSâ€

[flew to high]

Its been a while but here you guys go another suspenceful chapter enjoy!

Chapter 5
Later that night…
“Yo Rembrant, where are you manâ€