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How Sully & Jesse formed the Orphans

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 8:47 pm
by Alex
In the year 1978 February 3rd

(Sully and Jesse were both playing basketball at the park)

Sully:Look Jesse...Ive been thinking for a while...

Jesse:Yeah man?

Sully:We should create a gang me you and everyone at the Orphanage how does that sound?

Jesse:I dont know...We could get busted or even killed!

Sully:No we wont as long as nobody knows...

Jesse:Ok ill think about it lets just finish our game ok?

Sully:Sure...

(Sully and Jesse knocks on door of the Orphanage)

(Mercy opens it up)

Mercy:What do you want?!

Sully:Ive been thinking we should create a gang me Jesse and all the others Orphans...

Mercy:Ha!Ha!Ha! yeah...And whats this gang gonna be called the Orphans?

Sully:Good one Mercy i like that dont you Jesse?

Jesse:Yeah thats cool...

Mercy:I was being Sarcastic...

Sully:Tell the others about it ok?

Mercy:Ok...whatever!

(Mercy slams the door)

Anybody like it?

How Sully & Jesse formed the Orphans

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 9:57 pm
by Swan was a wimp
put some more storyline into it it was very short and didnt build up any background or anticipation :)

Re: How Sully & Jesse formed the Orphans

Posted: Tue Jun 27, 2006 2:02 am
by Cowboy 79
please keep writing I really like it

Re: How Sully & Jesse formed the Orphans

Posted: Tue Jun 27, 2006 2:29 am
by Storm86
I dunno man. I don't think it would be that easy just to up and start a gangĀ  :doubt:

Re: How Sully & Jesse formed the Orphans

Posted: Tue Jun 27, 2006 3:56 am
by $now4Ever
I liked it i would just like a little more to read thats all. But overall i liked it.