Five Minutes (a drabble.)

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Five Minutes (a drabble.)

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Author's Note: For those not in the know, a drabble is pretty much a term for a very short piece of fiction. I'm not sure if I'll write more about this character, she doesn't even have a name. Maybe. Tell me what you guys think.
Five Minutes
By Space Toaster
I’m five minutes away from getting my ass kicked. I’m sitting on an overturned bucket in a junkyard. They’re glancing at me, some whispering, most of them talking loudly. They probably think I’m crazy, and that’s fine. Their leader laughed in my face when I told him I wanted to join.

“Ha! You gotta sense of humor, I like that.”

“Do I look like I’m joking?”

He was even more amused that I was serious. “All right girlie, we’ll give it a go.”

It’s going to be me, versus four of them. It’s going to end with them kicking my teeth in, but that’s fine. What matters to them is I can take the beating. They play rough down here. It’s time for my medicine.

I walk into the little squared off arena. The spectators make catcalls, very loudly letting me know what they would like to do to me. One of them decides to act it out, earning laughter from his friends. I wonder if they’ll ever think of me as a friend. It’s doubtful.

Someone yells ‘GO!’ and right away, the first guy throws a punch at my face. I dodged the first few hits, but eventually they ganged up on me. I throw my fists and make contact with flesh. It doesn’t stop them from beating me but they’ll be feeling those bruises eventually. I’m in a hurricane of fists and boots. I guard my head and face. A fist sails into my solar plexus and I go down on my knees, wheezing for air. I spit out blood and a molar. Everything aches.

Later I’m sitting on a creaky folding chair, with one of my attackers behind me. My hair falls down my back, nearly reaching my waist.

“You sure about this?” He fingers a lock of hair, mousy brown and smooth.

“Just do it already.”

He saws through it with a pocket knife. I watch my hair fall to the dirty asphalt. He shaves the rest of it off and I stand up. My neck already feels cold, but I like it. It will be a plenty change from getting my hair yanked on in a rumble. A denim vest is tossed to me.

“Welcome to the Turnbulls, girlie.”

I know none of these guys like me, I’m just fresh meat right now. They’ll harass me; laugh at me, who knows what else. They’ll learn eventually. I took their beating just to humor them. They don’t know about my collection of human teeth. They don’t know why I came to them. They don’t know how truly fucking crazy I am. But they’ll learn.
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I hope yer considering a career in writing; talent of this caliber is not something with which to trifle

Oh, and have her go back to get that hair to donate to Locks of Love!
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Amazing!!! Hmmm Why is she there??? I want a pasrt 2.
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Looking very good so far. I am interested in seeing what happens next, and what this chick's deal is: why she's so crazy, why she's joined the Turnbulls, etc..

You also write very well, and I can't seem to find any glaring mistakes or errors in there, so yeah, keep it up. I would also consider turning this from a drabble to a fully-fledged fan-fic; it certainly has the potential to be a very enjoyable fan-fic.

Nice job thus far.  :D

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Dud wrote: ...I can't seem to find any glaring mistakes or errors in there...
not for lack of trying, i'd wager!
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Re: Five Minutes (a drabble.)

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THIS IS SO COOL SPACE...i liked how you've but a girl in the turnbulls becos you wudnt expect a girl to jion the ac's yeah you shud do a secound part and make it into a relli great story like you normally do!! like always you put on a great show and i love al, your work and i hope like me everyone on this forum respects space toaster's work and her herself yeah you have once agen wowed me!! adios boppers and oh space your number1. :D 8)

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