I think the story is really good and its definitly long enough since its about 7 pages .But the only thing I don't like is that Crospey joined the gang,I just cannot picture that.
We're gonna make it back. We came this far and we're gonna make it the rest of the way!
Well,if you read the very second story in the series,Cropsey gives Swan his knife out of loyalty.Thats why Cropsey joined the gang,LOYALTY.does that answer your question?
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ROCKY,THE WARRIORS,THE BLUES BROTHERS AND EVRYONE ON THIS BOARD KICK A$$
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You got the stuff? I want you to hit everything in sight. I want everyone to know the Warriors were there. -Cleon
Cowboy-Hey Swan toss me a hershey bar,Im not that hungry.
Swan-Sure.( gives Cowboy a Hershey Bar)
Ajax-(takes big bite of sandwhich)It took ya an hour and forty five minute to get
1 loaf of bread,6 lunch meats,beer,a tub of ice cream,and 10 god damn chocolate
bars?
Vermin-No shit.
Ajax-Meet any strange wool?
Vermin-Hell Yes!
(Ajax got all excited)
Ajax-Are you freakin serious?!What was she like you son of a bitch?
Vermin-Oh boy was she hot!
Ajax-Get her number,huh,huh!C'mon be honest!
Vermin-Yep!And I aint givin it to you!
Ajax-Does she at least have a "friend"?
Vermin-A bunch of 'em!
Ajax-Gesus Christ!Keep talkin!
Vermin-Hey,If its alright with Swan,I'll bring you,and the guys up there!
Cowboy-(on his knees)Oh please Swan!
Swan-Fine.
Cropsey-If anyone comes to jap you,you and Mercy just run!
Ajax-Cut this shit!Lets Go!!!!!!!!!!
(So all the guys except Swan and Mercy leave to the Lizzies hangout)
Mercy-Lets go for a walk.
Swan-OK.
(they both leave the hangout)
Mercy-Man your always grabbin me by the arm,cant you hold my hand or somethin?
Swan-Im not that type of pers-
(mercy kisses him,then they both end up holding hands)
Mercy-Im hungry,lets get somethin.
Swan-So am I.
(while walking,Mercy pulls out that flower thing Swan gives to her at the end of the
movie)
Swan-You still have that?
Mercy-Yeah,I love it.
Swan-Tss...
Mercy-Are You alright,you look worried?
Swan-Im just worried about the guys,ya know,if they get hurt.
(Swan and Mercy eat somewhere)
Vermin-Alright boys,this door unlocks the hottest chicks ever!
Cropsey-Oh man.
Vermin-Drumroll please!
(Ajax drumrolls on Cowboys head)
Vermin-Open sesame!
The door opens,and The Warriors are amazed because the chicks are so hot!
Malory-Hey Vermin!
Vermin-He-llo.
(all the Warriors except Vermin got 3 Lizzies to "handle")
Back to Coney.
Mercy-Do you like me,or love me Swan?
Swan-What would you want me to say?
Obviously his answer was the second one.
(Mercy smiles,then kisses Swan)
Mercy-Do you like that?
Swan-Yep.
(Just then a cop car pulls up)
Cop-Hey come 'ere you lousy hoods!
Swan-C'mon lets go!
(The cops chase Swan and Mercy until they get to the subway)
Cop-Your going down chick!
Swan-Mercy!You pigs let her go!
Sadly,Mercy gets tooken away.
Swan-(talking under his breath)No freakin way.
(Swan walks back to the hangout with watery eyes)
Vermin-Ladies we should get going.
Ajax-Who you calling lady pal?
Vermin-Just lets go!
So they take the subway home.
(Swan was sitting on the floor,leaning against the wall,tears running down his cheeks)
Vermin-(crashes hangout doors open)Man that was some party!
They all pause to look at Swan crying.Just then they realizied what had happenend.
Ajax-(whispering to the guys but not Swan)Guys were gonna get her back,as soon
as Swan goes to bed,we're goin.
Cowboy-Ok.
Vermin-Alright.
Cropsey-For Swan.
Finally,Swan stands up,walks to the guys,and for some odd reason hugs Ajax.
Ajax-Im so sorry man,sorry for everything I've done,she'll be alright,trust me.